Mohammed Yaman Swai
11-A
Language Arts
Ms.Saba Batool
The Student’s Worst Enemy: The Heavy Burden of Homework
The most useless and most wasteful. Nothing can be compared to this thing. Homework. Ask any parent about homework and you will get a lot of different reactions. Some will be happy their children are busy after school. Some will be mad they don’t get enough family time with their children. Homework is given to students everywhere around the world. Some students will say it’s helpful and some will say it’s not. I stand here now to tell you that homework is not helpful and that it wastes so much valuable time. It has many side effects on students, it stops family time, and it keeps the students stressed.
Many students keep getting tired and exhausted of homework. Students keep saying they get headaches and nausea from doing homework after school. A Stanford researcher had done a study of the effects of homework on students. Their study had founded that 56% of students considered homework as a primary source of increased stress for them. Less than 1% of the students said that homework doesn’t cause stress. The same study conducted had proved that because of homework, students had suffered health problems. They started losing sleep, and thus, getting regular headaches, nausea, exhaustion, and stomach problems. The fact that students obtain sickness from daily work is a sign of a negative impact. Many other studies have been done in different places and the same results have come. Homework causes students to be more stressed, and it gives many health problems, and so, they should stop giving it.
Homework should be scrapped because it pollutes family time. The child doing homework doesn’t have enough time to spend with his family. He doesn’t get to bond with his siblings. He doesn’t get to enjoy free and playful time. Family time between parents and children is what creates a comfort and stress-free zone. It makes the child have fun and relax while enjoying time with his family. A study survey proved that 64% of students get homework on any given day- twice of what was there in 1981. When will there ever be time to hang out with friends? When will there ever be time to play a game of football or basketball? When will there ever be time to sit, relax, and write on your own diary? Without homework, children will have time to spend with their parents and friends. They will relax and finally get some rest from the headache they get in school. Homework stops this important family bonding time and that is why they should stop giving it.
Stress for students is very common around the world. Stress on students from school is the number one cause for students to drop out of school. They get very stressed and fail many subjects. Based on a research submitted to The Business Insider, students drop out because they failed so many classes. These students were asked why they failed so many classes, and the response was stress from school. Homework, even after all the stress in school, increases stress by the time when they do homework at home. They will be suffering a lot after what they had suffered in school. Homework increases stress on students after the stress they get in school, and it’s removal would be a benefit, not only for removing stress, but for improving academic performance.
Now you might say homework is helpful for revision before a test or for extra practice on the lesson, but that doesn’t really matter. Revision can be done without homework and by just reading the book. Homework doesn’t really matter in extra help or not. If a person is really committed to reviewing the lesson, he would open his book and read by himself. Another point, you might say now that it doesn’t waste time and that it can be done quickly. Well, many students can’t do it as fast. Many will be struggling in doing it and it will waste their time with their family and games. Homework is not a waste of time, however it just wastes time. Homework is very annoying and they should stop giving it.
In conclusion, homework should be scrapped because it has many side effects on students, wastes so much time, and keeps the student stressed. Homework brings headache and exhaustion, which then leads into sleep deprivation and lack of concentration.Students around the world suffer a lot from only homework. Their time with their family and friends is wasted on doing something that doesn’t really help much. They stay stressed even more after school because of this. I hereby say again: homework is not helpful and it is big waste of everything: therefore schools should stop giving it.
Ms. Saba's Class english honors 
I would like to begin first and foremost by stating that this is a structurally complete argumentative essay. The writer displays great awareness for his audience. Being a student, the writer remains unbiased and calm for the most part. The essay did lack in terms of vocabulary usage. The language used in the essay seemed too bland, simple, and repetitive. Personally, I found the attention-grabber not stimulating (An anecdote would have worked fine with such a topic). The counter-argument seemed to lack supporting details. Within that paragraph, the writer poses a few bold statements -“Revision can be done without homework and by just reading the book. Homework doesn’t really matter in extra help or not.”. The writer fails to provide evidence to support this claim. For example, he could have included a study showing the ineffectiveness of homework in influencing test results. In my opinion, this topic is extremely conventional, which made the essay very uninviting and repellant. Overall, it was a satisfactory essay.
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I appreciate the initiative by you Samir
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Hello Samir. I think his evidence doesn’t seem convincing enough for you, he has quoted a research which discussed the reasons of the reasons of students drop outs from colleges. I share the same thought as your about the attention grabber. I have made some suggestion also.
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Overall, a good writing. Just a couple of suggestions for you! Please revise the opening sentences of your essay. Your first few sentences are like a sweeping statement. This is argumentative writing and you must first build your argument and then give your opinions in an objective manner. If you remember, we have discussed in class that we need to maintain an objective tone in our writing. If you have used these statements as a hook to grab the attention of your readers, you may opt for them to be a quotation by some parents in your writing. I like the way you have developed your argument.
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The topic is usually common but it is still a good job that you gave recognition to the topic, it especially relates to the people who are currently struggling with it and have problems related to it. Overall, some changes need to be made such as being objective or change add more vocabulary but a great structure and portray of the message. Good Job!
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Good choice for the essay, I like the structure. However, you have used too much basic language. I think it miss a pinch of formal tone. Overall, it is an interesting piece.
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Great essay! Kudos to you for the use of research. Academic vocabulary could be included more, but the objective of the essay was accomplished in my opinion.
The structure of the essay follows the format we learned in class, which is always a good sign. As Armie pointed out, you did a good job in revisiting a common topic and improving the common argument.
There were two sentences that I enjoyed particularly; “Now you might say homework is helpful for revision before a test or for extra practice on the lesson, but that doesn’t really matter. Revision can be done without homework and by just reading the book.” I truly admire the fact that you pulled in some of your own, as well as your peer’s, everyday concerns, as this a topic that is debated almost weekly. A very marvelous read.
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Over all, I believe this essay is enjoyable, but it is far from perfect. The attention grabber could have been better. I also feel that some morw evidence was needed to back up the arguments.
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I love the topic you chose for your essay. The best part of your essay is the second body paragraph where you explain about how students do not get enough time to spend with their family, friends, etc. because of the burden of homework. I think what needs to be improved is the use of vocabulary and the attention grabber needs to be more catchy. Overall, I loved the way you presented your argument and you did a really good job!👍
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Let me start off by applauding your excellent arguments and objective rebuttals. Furthermore , you remained completely unbiased, especially that you included some experience(or at least it seemed like a students experience), however , the overall result lacked the “formal” essence of an argumentative essay, which could simply be fixed by adding more academic terms.
But all in all, it was a writing that’s quite saturating to the brain . Great job .
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This essay was a pleasure to read. you show great understanding of the topic and you have good arguments.But there are some short comings, for instance the topic that you chose is very common and not very interesting. you can use better academic vocabularies. lastly you can provide better evidence to support your argument in some of the paragraphs.
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